Fans of The Darkest Minds by Alexandria Bracken will enjoy EVOLUTION: DAUNTLESS HOPE a completed 95,000-word YA urban fantasy, set in a nation torn apart by hate with two species on the brink of a second war.
Hope’s power to control water, fire, earth, and air is the key to saving the Unies—super-humans—from extinction. It’s a secret kept from her until her forbidden love for a human boy threatens the Unies’ last chance for survival.
Hope thought she had everything she wanted the day she set foot in Brander High after years of homeschool. For the first time she has a BFF and a hot telepathic jock has a crush on her. But her life goes from cheery to downright wrong the night she and her BFF hide their identities to sneak into a Los Angeles night club. There she meets a handsome and mysterious human, Tristan. Before she knows it, he has her heart and she’s lying to everyone to keep their love a secret. She knows her relationship with Tristan could land her in Lockup or worse if they’re caught. What she didn’t anticipate is her reckless behavior jeopardizing the fate of every Uni.
Born without the birthmark which connects all Unies, and the only Elemental in control of the four elements, Hope’s isolation as a child and the lies told were to keep her safe. A powerful human knows about her and has spent seventeen years looking for her because she’s destined to kill him. Now he has a weapon in arm’s reach and plans to eradicate the Uni problem for good. Hope is terrified of what she’ll have to release to stop him, knowing it might just kill her in the end, which she wants to avoid even if it means altering her destiny. Ultimately, she must decide if she’s willing to condemn an entire species to be with Tristan. Or will she become the Unies’ last beacon of hope, saving them from a fate where death is the only escape.
Monica, I like the query, but I love paragraph 3. I think you can chop paragraph 4. There's nothing wrong with it exactly, but 3 is so strong you can basically drop the mike. The only thing that bugged me about paragraph 2 was the phrase "super-humans." As you know, I saw your 250, so I was expecting to see it. But "Unies" which I didn't see before, is a much more interesting term. Why? Because a more or less even fight between two groups of equal power is more interesting than a fight between supernatural elites and loser "muggles." The first paragraph has a run-on sentence. I think you can write: ..."set in a nation on the brink of a second civil war." The hate is implied. Again, paragraph 3 is a blockbuster.
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